Actually I think I don't *really* deserve all the things you've said because I think a review should be done by judging the whole work of a writer, not only the writing.

First of all, I'm not a native English speaker, that's why my language is so "poor". It's sad, but foreign people don't have the capacity to write in English that American or English fans have.

So said, nobody ever told me that what I wrote didn't make sense, I think the sense of what I'm saying is quite easy to understand, I don't really think that my English is *that* bad.

About punctuation mistakes, that probably depends on my native language (Italian) which uses punctuation in a very different way than English, I assure you it's not easy to adapt thoughts in another language.

About the grammar, I assumed a few mistakes would come in the way, I'm just sorry they seem to be so many.

By the way, all my stories have a disclaimer to clarify this fault of mine, you find it in the very first chapter: "I won’t have a beta reader for this, so please, be careful with my English and don’t be too surprised if you find huge mistakes."
If you didn't want to read a fanfic for the pure fun of it but to make a critic review of its language, than you could have at least read the disclaimer and save yourself the effort  ;)

And for the characters who seem to be OOC, I don't totally agree. When MP or J are different than what we've seen on tv, I usually explain their changes. I spent many words to put down how they've changed and why. And if you'd read more, you would have had more answers to these changes.
Characters aren't static, IMHO. And actually I've read many fanfics with frigid-bitches-Miss Parkers or psycho-maniac-bastard-Jarods, which I consider being much more OOC than my two MP & J.

Lastly, I don't have a beta reader. I used to, but when stories are that long, it's difficult to bind someone to read and correct all your chapters.

I hope you give another chance to the story, if only to read the development of the plot. Otherwise thanks for the comments anyway :)

I love Parker and Sydney's relationship, I've always felt it could lead anywhere, even more than Jarod and Syd's one. I feel like he's actually a father to her, to both of them.