Wow, just....WOW. I don't think I've ever read a take on the Jarod/Centre relationship like this, before. Excellent job!
Author's Response: Heehee. Thanks!
Date: 18/07/09 05:49 am
Oh wow Haiza! This was definitely worth reading!!! The first drabbles describing Jarod's ruthless domination were scary, the first ending was very conventional in a way and yet perfectly fitting, heart-wrenching in its utter simplicity.
But the second ending!!! The twist is completely unexpected and... the only word I can think of is gutsy! Amazing really, superb! And I loved loved loved the final chapter, the way Jarod rediscovers the world...
(I only rated 9 because of the Broots/Miss Parker drabble which I think lets the whole piece down a bit... Not enough tension, too many words... I don't know..)
Thank you, Middleman, for such a great review. This was the funnest little story to write, and I can't wait to get around to rewriting it into something longer. Don't have much time at the moment.
I know exactly what you mean about the Broots/Parker one. It was actually written after everything else was done. I just needed to have Broots in there, you know? Maybe it'll work better when it's a longer story.
Fair warning: I'm writing a series of science fiction books, and I firmly intend to steal this story idea from myself and write it into a completely different story. So if anyone ever by accident reads a science fiction book that sounds very much like this, it's just me plagiarizing myself. Oh, and possibly lightly plagiarizing The Pretender...but not much. " :)Reviewer: middleman Signed [Report This]
Date: 24/06/09 09:06 pm