Good job, finally a chapter that when it ends, I don't feel like ripping Jarod a new one!  Well written. You do realize that it takes a bit of skillful writing to make the person reading it feel emotions that you are describing!

Good job. Please continue.

Okay, I still want to smack Jarod, wish Parker would toss her cookies all over him while he was asleep being the wonderful husband he thought he was.

Your story has the ability to make me angry at one character. can you guess which one? Anytime a storyteller is able to do that, to catch your imagination and give it emotions, has to be good at telling the story. 

So with that in mind I'll try not to write a story where Jarod gets pummeled while sleeping  next to Parker, by Parker.

 Good job, particualarly if you are a fan of the not so great husband type.  ;-)

Excellent chapter Miss Shannon! I love that you haven't turned Parker into a pregnant sap - she's a family woman and still has her edge which is so true to character. I'm especially enjoying the parts that are her point of view. Her sassy friends are great too, nice work with the original characters. Can't wait to read more!

I have to agree with nightowl: you can really make your readers feel the emotions of your characters. When I read your chapters I can see and feel what they are feeling. I can easely empathize with them.

I'm like nightowl, I mostely saw/see and cncentraded on Miss Parker's side of things than jarod's. Or maybe I'm to much like Miss Parker...

oh man, you are ripping my heart out~  and truthfully I could knock Jarod into next week. Genius that he is.

Wow... see when you can write and make people feel, really feel the story you got the audience you need. So keep writing... keep posting! 

P.S.: Wonder what they will think of Sydney . . .

I love that you brought Jarod's family in this story and that they are 'apprehensive' about this marraige. It wouldn't be very realistic that they would welcome her with open arms in the family. I am looking forward to read more about this and their first meeting! I hope Jarod will be on Parker's side. . . Please hurry with the next chapter!  

This is one of those stories that I look forward to each chapter and dread the end of each chapter. STOP the cliff hangers. 

hmm one does have to wander what dear Jarod has been up to that would leave him with nightmares about his own deed. 

And did MP really say anything about the Centre or is she being goaded by a creepy lawyer... yea.. just one of many. 

Who all is involved in this crime? 

so many questions and too many cliff hangers!! I know that is a good way to mark the end of a chapter.  A well done suspense story, with all the needed componets. 

Keep it coming!

Although I'm not a fan of Miss Parker getting pregnant/having babies and the inner sense thing, I like the characterisation you play out in this story.

I find them well thought-out. Even after the centre Miss Parker wouldn't be a fun loving woman. She still would have her softer side, but only towards the people close to her.
And Jarod would still be the (irritating) nice guy, that everybody love's.
Mostly I'm not so keen on original characters, but I really like the ones you made up. there is a great interaction between them and Jarod and Miss Parker.

And a last thought on Jarod's extracurricular activities; I don't believe he would cheat on Miss Parker or any other woman he's involved with. Even tough he has a dark side, I don't think it's in his nature. So I'm eager to find out, what he really has been doing and what truth he has been hiding from Miss Parker.

deliciously suspenceful. Great job with the new chapter, your plotting is well done. I was interested in how you developed the character's dispositions and habits. I like that you didn't paint a "now that he has her life is all rosey".  Relationships -friends, lovers, whatever are always work. Work at ignoring those quirky things we all do, or work at adjusting to moods.. you did a good job in describing it by either actions or dialogue.

Hope to be reading the next chapter very soon.

.. but is Jarod really happy in that marriage? Or rather does Miss Parker really love him?!

Author's Response: Sure she does. I'm trust trying to keep her in character: That means she's being difficult. :-)