Reviews For Bruises
Title: Chapter 1

Yeah! A Gemini-centered piece *does a happy dance*!!!!! and a very good one at that!

In very few words you convey the tension in the SIM lab, Gem's fear, Raines' violent nature, the sweeper's indifference... Thankfully you give us hope at the end! I loved it!

Reviewer: middleman Anonymous starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 11/11/08 09:43 am
Title: Chapter 1

Great Job 24! A combination of emotions..anger at Raines, pain for that poor little boy, then hope of a brighter future just around the corner for Gemini. Well done.

Reviewer: Mirage Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/11/08 02:28 am
Title: Chapter 1

Nice little piece!

One thing you might want to change for continuity's sake:  If Gemini was four in the first section and fourteen in the second, the second section would be ten years later, not fourteen.

Overall, great job.  You really made me feel for poor Gem.

Reviewer: MP Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/11/08 01:50 am


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