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Title: The Long Road Ahead

I keep reading and wondering how hard it must be to write something this graphic and detailed. The subject matter seems like it would be hard to write. You stayed in a dark place for 40 chapters, many months. That seems hard. I can't tell by reading it though. You not only wrote about these things you tackled the complexities of family life and transforming the Centre to a more altruistic org. You juggled all the balls and didn't drop any. It's brilliant.

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Date: 27/10/20 11:06 pm
Title: Letting Go

Oh... perfect.

SOmething that important can wait.. Parker's wit survived.

Jarod legit dropped the truth

"I'm concerned," corrected Jarod. "My concerns are, apparently, valid. You're taking my words far out of context to suit the false persona you contrived for yourself when you returned from university. You twist yourself to fit their mould, you discard anything that doesn't complement the Huntress. I suppose by this time next week you'll have convinced yourself that you lured me to the cabin."

 

Love Parker's "i know my way home"

I see why people love this and hate this and need more of this

 

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Date: 27/10/20 10:36 pm
Title: In The Balance

and then she does this and accuses him of pretending and he is pretending but she's doing it too.

So much suspense, action, and drama. I was wondering what terrible thing Jarod would do next but...oh, my god what you have done here is so subtle, it's the frog in a pot of water heated slowly analogy.

I'm glad she still answered honestly at the end that she's not ok. Tight story. Scary, but so freaking well written.

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Date: 27/10/20 09:58 pm
Title: The Hardest Word

I'm ready to dig in deeper.

What stands out so much here is how you write Parker... she is as she was, as I remember, trying to create a smile and be a certain way so Jarod will think everything is ok and he will leave her alone. SHe already learned that he won't go away by being shouted at, and she knows that she can't force him to leave so she changes tactics and does this. So much a pretender she is. You sculpt your stories and build them and Mirage they are all solid. You blow me away.

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Date: 27/10/20 09:51 pm
Title: Running In Circles

Oh oh!! The way Jarod is talking to Sydney on the phone while entering the hospital is just so super awesome. I always feel like I'm watching what you've written instead of reading and I love it. You are amazing.

Parker shoothing the phone. She would. I love it.

I'm going to rest and absorb everything and come back again soon to read. I need to get my thoughts in order.

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Date: 24/10/20 04:31 am
Title: Freedom?

Oohh Oh. I almost feel sorry for Jarod. I know drugs were invovled and Raines orchestrated it all but  but but I can feel sorry that he was coerced into doing the stuff he's done, all the crimes he did, and still feel protective of Parker. He's still complicit. He decided to keep taking the drugs. He admits that he liked being able to cross lines and feel no remorse. I love that Parker regains power and doesn't let him keep her there. She just puts the car in reverse and leaves. I'm glad.

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Date: 24/10/20 04:28 am
Title: Clean Slate

Wow Parker keeping up a professional and graceful appearance to show everyone she's ok and I think with her pride and just the not wanting to talk about it and not wanting anyone to know this is fitting for her character and totally plausible. I like the tender moments with Sydney trying because he knows her so well. I don't blame Lyle for wanting revenge.

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Date: 24/10/20 04:20 am
Title: Into The Night

Whoooo. Lyle. I'm loving Lyle. I'm Lyle right now.

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Date: 24/10/20 04:12 am
Title: What Lies Beneath

Ok so the visual on this the way you describe the hidden portal and its clever hidden opening. Jarod is really clever.

So she's begging now for him to kill her, because now she knows she's been drugged and would prefer death to that.. slavery in away. She'd rather die than be with him and lose herself, her identity, her freedom, to be blind to what he is. He seems close to getting away with everything. I can't blame her. She doesn't want to be complicit in any way in her own imprisonment with him but she isn't complicit at all. I know she doesn't know that right now. He did all of that to her and will try to make her feel responsible for it all because that's what violators like him do.  You really impressively paint the dark strokes of this horror. Don't worry I won't ask how you're able to dive so deeply into the mind of a victim. I feel you tho and I appreciate the painstaking work you've done to not glorify this, to not use what Jarod did as a vehicle to make us hate him so when Parker kills him we'll cheer or to have Parker run after him and want to be with him after he did this to her. All she wants to do after this happens is to gain  back control and try to be not like a victim and that's why she allows him back into her life later. I get it. I get it.

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Date: 24/10/20 03:58 am
Title: Hot Water

So much to examine here. She can't remember when she'd said the words middle of nowhere before. I've already read some of this and some later chapters trying to be brave so I know he drugged her. It's like reading it again I can see it so clearly. She can't remember stuff because he drugged her. She's confused because she's being drugged. Does she remember that he raped her. So many thoughts Mirage! This truly is a work of horror fiction, a plausible one where the woman doesn't get revenge at the end just like in real life. In real life rapists who even brag about raping women become presidents just ask donald trump.

 

In the water it's now obvious that she is frightened of Jarod and what he does to her in the tub, the implied going down that's oral rape. That's clear now like it never was before.

Then he gaslights her, makes her think she's crazy. If he wasn't a sociopath, if he hadn't stolen someone's kidney, it would be hard to believe this but he does seems to get off on terrorizing people and she was chasing him so she kind of fits the proflie you know? On some level he must have some resentments. This is all too plausible. It fits with Carthis, her strangeness, how small and vulnerable she was and how it seemed he was the viscious hunter and she was the prey. Then the tea and the hauntedness. How she just got a little cold and wet and lost it that easily. She was completely together and stoic after seeing her mother get shot and killed by Raines but this, she already knew the Centre did bad stuff. What happened in Carthis shouldn't have caused her to go out of character... unless she was drugged or something... like .... with tea.

Carthis was realy weird. LIke really really weird.

Wow wow. I have so many thoughts that I don't know how to voice or collect. I don't know how to put into words what I'm thinking so I'll leave it at that.

I like how Lyle tries to be hero but you make it plausible because he's kind of not doing it right but that's Lyle. He was more used to being bad.

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Date: 24/10/20 03:48 am
Title: Sleeping With The Enemy ?

"Nothing. I'm fine. I'm just-" She pushed her hands beneath the blankets. "I'm looki-"

"What," He asked, "What are you looking for?"

Oh, nothing, wonderboy, just my panties and woefully misplaced common sense.

 

And that says it all. So he didn't rape her, but I think ummm no actually he did rape her tho because the balance of power is all wrong here and she suspects something.

If she's too afraid to say no it's rape so this is why you caution people against this because this is rape and another thing is many people don't even understand that duress-consent isn't consent.

A person can say yes, can even scream yes but if they are doing it because a gun is at their head it's not consent. So I get it now. AT first read it's like ok she didn't really say no here so it's all cool and I was wondering why people think this is such a horrific story, but then I realized she also didn't say yes either. She didn't even say yes.

She didn't say anything. He didn't even ask. They didn't even discuss this. She said we're not going to do this like she already knew what he was going to do to her. He just raped her. I had to read this part 3 times to get what you did here. I'd say you're courageous for this but you'd be pissed off because no one should have to be courageous to tell the truth either in real life or in fiction am I right? You're amazing. I hope I can say that and not piss you off.

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Date: 24/10/20 03:35 am
Title: A Little Trust

I like that Parker is catching Jarod in a lie and filing it away and it's like she knows but probably wonders if it's the same Centre training supsicions she's always had. It's not an easy position. You navigate this situation well and really  go to some dark places that make the reader think. It's amazing. I'm going to absorb this so far and rest and come back.

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Date: 23/10/20 05:17 am
Title: While You Were Sleeping

Omg I love Lyle in this. Wow.

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Date: 23/10/20 05:11 am
Title: The Downward Spiral

so even here I'm thinking ok Jarod's sedating her but he must have a good reason and it's nothing bad. I am so wrong. I know I'm wrong because I checked ahead a few years ago. You bring all of the right elements to the table, including plausibility, and you're an awesome story teller. I'm wowed.

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Date: 23/10/20 04:52 am
Title: The Twilight Zone

Spectacular. Seriously. The first part really hammers home the extent of training and it seems so plausible and that makes everything else plausible. The suturing scene was surreal and so accurate. You graphically described it all and I can imagine Jarod sitting there doing that to her. Oh my god it's too much. But that's a compliment... that's how good you are. THe last line is just so classic Parker that I think everything might be ok but I already know it's not gonna be. I have a problem reading things that are so well written I start feeling like I'm there and what a scary place to be.

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Date: 23/10/20 04:50 am
Title: Stormfront

It's hard to admit this but I'm already a little scared. You really set the tone so we know something is coming. I've heard all about this and have read some of it but I'm going to try to be brave and read it all. It's so extremely well written and in character already. Your descriptive is... doh you should know all of this by now. You're a writer. You're really good, professional grade, Pretender caliber. The subject matter though bothers me a little bit. It's very dark and scary.

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Date: 23/10/20 04:46 am
Title: Square One

Oh hh the mental image of Jarod licking his wounds... what can I say? I can't leave my room and .... I can dream.

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Date: 03/04/20 04:50 am
Title: Such Sweet Sorrow

my heart my heart you break it.

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Date: 03/04/20 04:49 am
Title: Oh, What a Tangled Web

and then this happens and oohhh

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Date: 03/04/20 04:29 am
Title: Fear

Ohhh the tension. How do you write that and capture them so perfectly like they were on the show? OMG. I need more.

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Date: 03/04/20 04:28 am
Title: Pretending

Yowza. Jarod so serious and scary.

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Date: 03/04/20 04:16 am
Title: Inside out. Upside down.

I can't stop seeing Sydney shrink them both and everything Jarod said to Sydney is true. True. Sad but true.

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Date: 03/04/20 04:08 am
Title: The Best Laid Plans

awww I love this. Your text got large in places but I know you talk about glitches sometimes lol and it just makes me giggle when I do see glitches lol. Awesome chapter.

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Date: 03/04/20 03:57 am
Title: Give And Take

Oh I love so much how Parker keeps Jarod guessing.. how you keep us all guessing. I want to thank you again for this REFUGE and I thank the people in charge of this website who gave you and all of these authors and readers a place of ...  REFUGE.

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Date: 03/04/20 03:40 am
Title: A Fire In The Dark

OMG I love the missing piece you gave us. Fits pretender perfect.

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Date: 03/04/20 03:37 am
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