I think Emily and Miss Parker could really get along well were it not for the whole stealing and hunting her brother thing. I'm almost sure Alex is already regretting kidnapping Emily by now ;)
I love Broots and Sdyney in this chapter, especially Broots' thoughts on the sweepers' IQ.
And obviously Sam took a page or two out of Miss Parker's book of snark :)
The pace is really picking up now and I'm looking forward to the next part.
Glad you like
- MReviewer: Cathy Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/08/08 09:32 am
Good chapter, things are picking up a bit. the story remains well put together, I remain impressed by the fact that so many of you wrote it and worked it into one seamless -suspenseful and well written piece.
Nicely done. Cudos to your editor, and to all you writers.
Author's Response: Well thank you Nightowl. But just to clarify, we don't have an editor. I mean I suppose since I add the color to the text I do edit the text, but I don't touch the literary content (except for my own, just can't help myself there every once in a while). So with the exception of a few "self edits", this is all exactly how we wrote it about a year ago (reason for the "chapterization" is so it doesn't look so unbelievably huge for me to code in).
- MReviewer: nightowl Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 01/08/08 04:59 pm