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Title: Games and Gambits

Wow, this was unexpected. Yay you, not everyone can manage to jump into the mindset of a story after such a long hiatus.

I have to say I was pleased to see it up. I took quite a verbal lashing from Jacs after she discovered this story. Apparently I deserved severe punishment for not telling her about "this awesome story I was betaing for", so lets just say I hope to hear from you soon (don't know if I can take that one more time *has flashback pretender-style*).

Again, you really did a great job on this one. Congrats on being back in the game!



Author's Response:

Thanks!  And sorry I seem to have hit another hitch.  (Didn't really mean to wait 2 months before posting the next chap . . .)  And tell Jacci she's not allowed to be mean to my Manoline . . . she *did* know I was posting.

Anyway, new chap should be up shortly.  All accolades go to my lovely betas.

Reviewer: Manoline Signed [Report This]
Date: 16/07/08 03:00 pm
Title: Games and Gambits

wow, great chapter. poor Jarod, not even a chance. Bad MP. Looking forward to more.

Author's Response: Yep, you pretty much summed up this chapter.  Thanks for the kind words.  Give me a couple minutes and I should have more for you.

Reviewer: whashaza Signed [Report This]
Date: 16/07/08 10:57 am
Title: The Alley

I'm sooo ecstatic that you decided to continue this piece! It really is one of my favourites-you're hard work has more than paid off in my eyes! You have this real knack of creating something completely new and refreshing out of a situation that is still so in tune with the series without it becoming really predictable or clichéd! And that's not to mention that your style is so descriptive and visual that reading each chapter is like watching a mini-series unfold!

Thank you so much for sharing this piece. I'm really, really looking forward to see what comes next!

Also, just curious as to how you came up with the drug name -you're not a videogame fan by any chance lol??



Author's Response:

Thanks, jk!  I'm glad you're enjoying the story.  It's been bouncing around in my head, begging to be written, but putting it on paper has been harder than I could have imagined.  I couldn't have done it without Sarah and Terra, my betas.

I am a very occasional, very casual video game fan, but that's not where I got the drug name.  "Animus" (as Google was happy to inform me) is simply Latin for "memory" (though it has several other meanings--see end notes for chapter 2).

Anyway, thanks for the great review, and I hope you keep reading!

Reviewer: _jk_ Signed [Report This]
Date: 16/07/08 09:09 am
Title: Games and Gambits

Ohh that was very exciting, can't wait to see what happens. I fear for poor Jarod though and have never hated Parker quite as much as I do right now. So glad too that some idiot at the Centre finally figured out that the vents were a security risk!!!

Author's Response:

Thanks for the kind words.  Can't tell you how glad I am that you've "discovered" this story.  I hope you can get back into it and enjoy the next chapter . . . Well, maybe "enjoy" isn't the right word . . . just read it!

P.S. No being mean to my Manoline. (points to Sarah's review) You *don't* wanna see what my writing would be like without her.

Reviewer: jacci Signed [Report This]
Date: 16/07/08 05:05 am
Title: Believe Your Own Lies

OMG that was so good that it hurt. Why has nobody told me about this before? More more more more more!!!!!!

Author's Response:

So good it hurt?  That's a good thing, right?

Seriously, though, thanks Jacci!  After a *long* hiatus I've been strapping down to get the next chapter edited and ready.  It should be up in a few days time.

Soon soon soon soon!

Reviewer: jacci Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/07/08 03:31 am
Title: The Alley

I somehow managed to stumble upon this little gem and really must insist that you continue it... please I'm hooked...

You've really got the character descriptions and conflicts down pat. I loved your take on Sydney's reaction to Jarod with Angelo-that part was written particularly flawlessly, and the opposing sides of Miss Parker that you decided to explore...

Yep. You've really got to keep it going lol, you can't leave it on 'Trust Sydney' thats just cruel!!



Author's Response:

Thanks, jk!

To be honest, this story had gotten to a point where it was very difficult to write.  I was trying to deal with heavy angst while filling some gaping plot holes, and I just didn't feel like my heart was in it anymore.  Reviews like this are what helped me move past that and get writing again.  You reminded me why I love this story.  It's been a long road, but I should be posting again in a few days, so I hope you'll give the next few chaps a shot.

Thanks for saving my story.

Reviewer: _jk_ Signed [Report This]
Date: 23/05/08 01:24 pm
Title: Believe Your Own Lies

I absolutely love this. I hope you continue it soon it is going to be hard to wait to find out what happens next! Very well plotted story, your character come to life.

I can't say enough, Please add more soon. 

 

  



Author's Response:

Thanks, nightowl!

I feel really terrible about leaving people in suspense for so long.  I have an entire story arc plotted and the next three chapters *almost* finished, so I should be posting soon.  Thanks for your support!

Reviewer: nightowl Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 08/04/08 05:14 am
Title: The Alley

Terrific story!  You have a great writing style and the characters are true to the series. Can't wait to see what will happen to Jarod.

Author's Response:

Thanks!

I should be posting a new chapter in the next couple of days, so I hope it doesn't disappoint.  It's great to know that people are enjoying my writing.

Reviewer: Jeanne B Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 02/04/08 03:27 pm
Title: Believe Your Own Lies

Hi

 I juist read your story it was very good.



Author's Response: Thanks!  It's always nice to hear from a reader.

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26/03/08 09:55 pm
Title: Believe Your Own Lies

Well done!  Now we just need a another chapter or two, or three or what the heck!  Make it several more!

Author's Response:

Thanks, RaChell!

I know it's been an obscenely long hiatus, but I'm *almost* ready to post the next chap.  After that, updates will be coming fairly quickly, so I'll try not to torture you too much.

Thanks for the kind words!  Yes, believe it or not, I am still writing.

Reviewer: RaChell Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 07/12/07 10:45 pm
Title: Believe Your Own Lies

I love your story!! Its awesome. I just started reading it and it has a great plot and I can't wait to find out how it will all turn out! I also loved the part where Angelo could understand Jarod's shorthand because he connected with him. I would have never thought of that. Awaiting your next chapter!!!

Author's Response:

Thanks, anamcharalove.  You have no idea how good this review made me feel.  When I read it, I was kind of at a low point, in my writing and in my life, and your review really cheered me up (and brought my muse back, he he).  It's great to hear from someone who's just discovered the story and is truly enthused by it.  So thanks, and I hope you enjoy the rest of the story!

Reviewer: anamcharalove Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 05/12/07 10:38 am
Title: Believe Your Own Lies

Such great writing. You really captured the unspoken messages that Sydney and Jarod can share in a conversation. Great chapter, can't wait for the next one!

Author's Response: Thanks, TLM!  I just hope the next few chaps can live up to expectations.

Reviewer: TLM Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/12/07 04:00 pm
Title: Believe Your Own Lies

Okay, you have my attention. (I hear that line somewhere;-) ) The last chapters have become chapters of character confliction. It's interesting and yet it is off kilter, we have no way of knowing which way it is going to go. You have Parker understanding motives, and yet the shrink misses Parker's. or does he?

I guess we need to stayed tuned to find out. good plot ploy--nasty but certainly a seat gripper.

Author's Response:

Thanks, Bucky!  Off kilter seems to be my muse's specialty . . . I'm glad it's keeping you interested, and I'm glad that you can see the various conflicts.

You're right, I'm not being very nice to the poor characters, am I?  Nice is boring . . .

Anyway, thanks for another great review, and I hope you keep reading!

Reviewer: Bucky Anonymous starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/12/07 08:48 pm
Title: Believe Your Own Lies

This is getting very interesting!!!

 

Wendy



Author's Response:

Thanks, Wendy!  Hope you keep reading!

Reviewer: cywen69 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 01/12/07 11:38 pm
Title: Believe Your Own Lies

Trust Sydney? I wonder...good chapter though. Looking forward to more.



Author's Response: Wondering is good.  You're supposed to wonder.  There's more on the way, and all will be revealed in time (if I feel like it, he he).  Anyway, thanks for another good review!

Reviewer: whashaza Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 01/12/07 01:51 am
Title: Believe Your Own Lies

Ohhh, very nice.  I kept expecting an escape attempt, specially since you have Parker so ready for it, but, no, you pulled the unexpected.  Great job.  Now for the tough question: how soon until the next chapter?



Author's Response: Glad you liked!  As for the next chap, the first draft is done and the beta wheels are turning, but I really, *really* need to pass finals, so it might be a couple weeks.  Hope you keep reading!

Reviewer: Tinanaz Signed [Report This]
Date: 30/11/07 11:35 pm
Title: Believe Your Own Lies

Hey!

 I imagine this chapter would have been difficult to write (at leas tit would have for me) but you did a wonderful job!! It was wonderfully written and I like how you have planted several seeds of hope in the  last two chapters.

 

Cannot wait for more, I found last year that my wriiting producitivty dramatically increased with proximity of exams. Good thing one can slack off in grad school :) 



Author's Response: Thanx, Katie!  This one was quite tricky to write, and I can only imagine what my poor betas went through.  Interesting thing about exams; I should really be studying every waking minute, but I'm getting plot bunnied quite a bit.  Must be the sleep deprivation:)  Unfortunately, in the interest of passing and not losing my scholarship I had to force myself to put fic writing on hold for a while.  My betas are still working dilligently (at least I *think* they are . . . Terra?  Hello?) and I should be getting back in the groove once break starts on the 14th.

Reviewer: KatieQ Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 30/11/07 11:31 pm
Title: Animus

ohh syd! what an outburst. tisk tisk tisk, better control that temper if you want to work with Jarod i would imagine lol. great work, keep it up and off to read chap three

Author's Response:

Yes, Syd does have a tendency to ruffle feathers that way . . .

Glad you're still enjoying it!  Can you do me a favor and just shoot me an email once you've read the rest?  Or just leave a review for chapter five, whichever comes easier.

Reviewer: Onisius Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/11/07 09:42 pm
Title: The Alley

I decieded to start reading some FanFictions again and choose yours since i have heard so many GOOD things about you  :D lol. Gald i did, so far i am really enjoying it. Poor Jarod though, he fought so hard and got no where. Alright, off to the next chap

Author's Response: Glad you're reading!  Hopefully that first bit was enough to hook you . . .

Reviewer: Onisius Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/11/07 08:41 pm
Title: Ghosts and Ghouls

Aw MP, this sucks!  As much as it hurts me to say that, really and truly it does suck.  You give us two (yes I counted them!) great chapters  and then leave us wanting for more!  You tease us and have us on the edge of our seat and then expect us to leave glowing reviews? 

OK, it's great, it's wonderful but you're mean and cruel making us wait for another chapter!MP.jpg



Author's Response:

(deep sigh, tragic face)  All my labor of love, and what do I get?  "Mean and cruel."  You're making my inner child cry . . .

Seriously, though, glad you like it enough to get ticked at me.  If I could teleport myself and my betas into an alternate time continuum so I could publish a new chap every day I would.  Since I can't you'll just have to bear with me.  More is coming, I promise!

Reviewer: RaChell Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 06/11/07 07:51 pm
Title: Ghosts and Ghouls

Terrific idea and well written. BUT being a Parker fan, I can't see her standing by doing nothing. Not when she also sees the affect it has on Syd. Parker always takes time to think it through, especially when there is no time -if you go by the series- other times she reacts on instinct.

No matter how you write this-as it is your story to write! I am enjoying it enough to check back often for more.

Author's Response:

Glad you're enjoying the story!  I'd also like to thank you for one of the first truly open critiques I've gotten outside of those my betas provide.  Comments like these are really helpful for me as a writer because they force me to really think about the characters.

For the record, I also consider myself a "Parker fan," but I don't think she's infallible.  I believe she's an incredibly strong, capable woman who is forced by circumstance to survive in a very treacherous environment.  She's capable of incredible acts of bravery and kindness (as we saw in Donoterase), but she's also learned to survive by occasionally sticking her head in the sand--that's the only way she knows to look out for #1.  My hope is that this story will explore both these facets of her personality, but that takes time and development.  If you'll bear with me, I think you'll like where she eventually ends up.

Wow, that was long.  Anyway, thanks for reading!

Reviewer: Bucky Anonymous starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 05/11/07 10:13 pm
Title: Ghosts and Ghouls

Another wonderful chapter!! i'm on the edge of my seat to see how this turns out!! Kudos to your beta's as well ;)

 

Hope the school term is treating you ok! If you ever want to talk atoms and bonds, you know who to come to. 



Author's Response:

You're too sweet--you're making me blush:)  As for how it turns out I think people keep saying that because they're hoping I'll slip and say that in the end . . . whoops.  Almost gave it away;)  Never fear, I'll keep posting until it is resolved--one way or another.

As soon as I can figure out the technological monster that is Windows Messenger (to me, anyway), we'll have that atoms and bonds talk!

Reviewer: KatieQ Signed [Report This]
Date: 05/11/07 05:42 pm
Title: Ghosts and Ghouls

I really love this story so far.  I hope they find the ghost soon.

 

Wendy



Author's Response: Thanks!  There will be more intrigue coming soon.  Hope you keep reading!

Reviewer: Wendy Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 05/11/07 03:30 pm
Title: Ghosts and Ghouls

Very good built-up chappie. You've given a lot of info in this one but left us with no doubt that even if thinks look really bleak, there's still hope. Wonder if MP is gonna have a change of heart and why Raines pulled the curtains on the poor sap he used for his proof. Guess what I'm saying is thanks for a well thought out story and looking forward to more. ;-)

Author's Response: Thanks, whashaza!  This one was quite tricky to structure; it was hard to decide how much info to give and how to give it without the story becoming a) boring, b) incomprehensible, or c) both of the above.  Glad to see you're still enjoying the story!  More is on the way.

Reviewer: whashaza Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 05/11/07 03:25 am
Title: No Other Way

Wow, I really love this story so far.  You have me on the edge of my seat with each chapter.  Poor Jarod, he's in a very bad place mentally (and physically) right now.  I'm surprised Angelo can't get the camera's turned off in the  other rooms so Jarod could escape through the vent in his cell.  I hope they come up with something soon.

 

Wendy



Author's Response:

Glad you enjoyed it!  If you're on the edge of your seat, imagine how my poor characters feel :)  Re Angelo and the key . . . well, there's lots of cameras and only one key.  It's a special key that only works when it's in the camera. (and that's the story I'm sticking to!)

I'll warn you, though, this is an ambitious piece on my part.  Resolution is more than a few chapters away, and things will get worse for Jarod before they get better.  But, no more on that subject!  Anyway, I'm glad you enjoyed, and I'll try to have updates posted soon.

Reviewer: cywen69 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05/10/07 10:35 am
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