You have an amazing way with details- reading it is a joy so far.  =)

I'm sooo ecstatic that you decided to continue this piece! It really is one of my favourites-you're hard work has more than paid off in my eyes! You have this real knack of creating something completely new and refreshing out of a situation that is still so in tune with the series without it becoming really predictable or clichéd! And that's not to mention that your style is so descriptive and visual that reading each chapter is like watching a mini-series unfold!

Thank you so much for sharing this piece. I'm really, really looking forward to see what comes next!

Also, just curious as to how you came up with the drug name -you're not a videogame fan by any chance lol??

Terrific story!  You have a great writing style and the characters are true to the series. Can't wait to see what will happen to Jarod.

Author's Response:

Thanks!

I should be posting a new chapter in the next couple of days, so I hope it doesn't disappoint.  It's great to know that people are enjoying my writing.

This is wonderful. I really liked your tactic: he got away, no he's caught, no he got away, no he's caught, no he got away, no he's caught.

However, initially I felt like I was reading any number of other stories I've come across or shows on TV - not that it wasn't well written, but I wondered what would set it apart from other stories. 

Then I read ch.2 and I didn't have to wonder at all. This chapter is fantastic. It takes one of the concept of the "renewal wing" and gives a fresh and unique perspective. The introduction of a new and intriging character is a good addition. I particularly enjoyed your portrayal of the political culture of the Centre beyond the Lyle/Sydney struggle over Jarod. I've always believed that one characteristic of a good writer is to leave the reader wanting more and you have definitely done just that. I can't wait to see what happens next.

From reading the above reviews, it sounds like you found a beta reader. I also proof, but I'm an example of those who can't write, teach. So if you ever need a backup feel free to contact me. topanga90290@sbcglobal.net   aka Terra.   Warning: I'm tough too; you can ask KatieQ, Jacci or Onisius.

BTW, I didn't do a ranking for your Dream piece, I don't know why it came up with 3 checks.

VERY nice! i love it from the beginning. and that's rare :o)

can't wait to read more :o)

peace! 

Good start. Wonder why Sydney looked horriefied. Looking forward to more.

Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed it whashaza!  Never fear, I will attempt to answer all the great questions of life, including just what goes on in our favorite shrink's crazy, complicated mind:)

Oh very good. I like how it starts out very much like an episode. And you really had me thinking Jarod was in the clear when he wandered off after the hostage-situation had been resolved.

I like the fact that your Miss Parker is as ruthless as she is, reminds me of how she was in season 1. But in many ways I think it would be very natural for her to be that way after the way she dismissed Jarod in the limo in IotH.

Overall a very nice beginning, will be looking forward to reading the story as it develops.


Author's Response:

Wow, thanks so much for those kind words. I have big plans for this story, but I'm still working out some of the details and problems. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Also, thanks for offering to beta for me. I've read some of your work, and it's excellent. I'll be in touch!