Boy I must have missed a chapter or two KatieQ!  None of the summary sounds familiar!  I'll have to go back and re-read before I can give you a decent review. But hey, if my posting a story is the only way to get you to post more of this one .... well I'll have to bite the bullet and crank out another one. 

Just kidding, good to see you still have a fire under this one.

I like, I like!!! just hope mp doesn't change into what she's pretending to be. hope ur working on this!!

Author's Response: next chapter is ooh so close.. oh so close.. thanks though :)

I would like you to know that this is one of the best stories I have read about the pretender. 

You are a very talented writer and have a great ability to tie characters and plotlines together.

I have immensely enjoyed reading your stories...and I am eagerly awaiting the next installment of this one!

Have you ever thought about becoming a fiction writer?

Keep up the good work!!! 

It took me several chapters to get into the story. It is well written, but for me when too many other characters are introduced you take something away from it being a Pretender or Centre story.

I admit it, I'm Parker fan first off --second -- I honestly don't see either Miss Parker or Jarod ever being happy with anyone else.

I think the episodes have shown that MP may hesitate and sometimes allow her upbringing to get in the way -but she ultimately does the right thing. AND she always pays the price for her hesitantancy or lack of trust in a situation.

You have very definite writing skills, you tell a wonderful story. My only problem (and it is more my problem than yours!)-- is that you introduce Parker too late into the story. I found myself scrolling down looking for more of her.

When you did write her in a few chapters ago, you did a good job with her interaction with the clone. I do believe she would without a thought, sacrifice herself to save Jarod. But then, that's me.

I do want to see how you continue this.

Author's Response:

Hey!

Thanks for the comments. I always like to discuss with people how they view the characters. I personally do agree with you about MP - that when it comes down to it in a 1:1 she will do the right thing.

But I also believe that her character took a bit of a turn after IOTH. I think she'll do the right thing, but i also feel that she believes that when it comes to certain situations, she is powerless. My primary goal after telling an interesting tale, is to stay true to the characters, while allowing them to grow within the context of the story. It is always nice to hear how people agree (or disagree) with how I see the characters.  

And you are right about one thing, I did neglect MP at the beginning of the story. I struggled with the Centre characters for the first bit, as I felt i needed to set the Africa stage, and they got kind of lost. I promise that they will be present for the rest of the story :)

As for original characters - i've tried to keep them to a minimum, because i know it is hard to warm up to them! The only one i've put much effort into is Lys, and i have to admit i've grown a bit attached to her. I hope that you can to by the end of this story - i keep MP in mind when writing a lot of her lines.

But thanks for the comprehensive review! I really appreciated it :)

Awesome new chapter

Oh creepy little old man, what are you up to? Wonder how many steps down the hallway they'll get before they're apprehended.

Good luck with your thesis!

Great Chapter, Katie.  Love how Lys is now the strong one and Jarod is the one needed help.  My favorite line is when Lys tells the guard to get "nice and intimate with the floor.".  It show the power she was commanding at that moment, without making her a b*^%h or an ice queen.  So the important question is how much is the thesis gonna interfer with the next chapter?

Author's Response: I'm glad you have your priorities straight re: my thesis versus the next chapter ;). But thanks for the feedback, I'm glad that you enjoyed and still could remember the plot line.

Hold your horses.

Stop the presses.

Just a darn minute.

Abort the mission.

Tsk. Tsk. Tsk. We betas work our fingers to the bone cleaning up the mess you call punctuation, grammar, spelling, vocabulary, sentences, storylines, punctuation, etc. just so you look good and readers are fooled into thinking you're actually literate and know how to put more than two words together. lol 

(Said with dripping sarcasm.) And then, Jacci, my friend, I'm soooo saddened (holding tongue in cheek so excuse mumbling) accuses us of the delay??? Well, okay, perfection does take a little time. (Drops of sarcasm and tears falling on my shoe, ugh - get it off!)

And then you, my friend KatieQ, do not come to our defense??? I'm crushed. (which makes talking even harder, when you're flat as a pancake, like Jay tosses in the air.) sniff, sniff (wipes nose on sleeve - not mine, Ken's. lol)

You'll both just have to make a public (pretender fan public only - others would think it's weird) apology to me here and I'll expect a glowing testimonial in the next A/N for ch.13 for which, as you know, your muse called on the great manatees in the sky for guidance. (You can say thanks to Onisius too, if you want.) So do I win the prize for most run-on sentences in a review? BTW, great chapter.

Nothing left to say, except I'm going for a hike in      Topanga Canyon. hehe  lmao  hahaha  lol

Finally! Very intriguing chapter. Cox is an interesting addition and I can't wait to see what Miss Parker has up her sleeve for Lyle. Keep it up keep it up!

Love it!  Better late than never!  Need more soon.  Creepy old man is really starting to freak me out.  It's so good, I've lost the ability to write complete sentences;)

Author's Response: i will do my very best to bring more soon. I'm glad visser is creeping everyone out.. he's doing the job he is supposed to! Thanks for the review

Great chapter, almost worth the wait.  The story keeps getting better and better.  And to quote someone else: more please. 

Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed Tina!! I have to make up for the fact Jarod keeps getting away in Nothing Means Something in this one ;).. but thanks for the review and hopefully le muse will cooperate better this time around..

AARGH!! What a cliffhanger!!! I hope you don’t intend on leaving us hanging for too long… you just gave me just a little inkling of hope in a world you created, of naught else but suffering and depression; I hope you can come up w/ something to back up the little night-light of hope you just produced!!!  :-p

Author's Response: night-light of hope... lmao! I love it. I'm really trying and i do apologize for the wait. The outside world is keeping me oh so busy!! I promise to keep kicking away at the next part... and agian SORRY for keeping you waiting. Thanks for the feedback though :)

Nice to see you decided to grace us with another chapter while I was gone!  About time and a exciting one too.  Yes, I want to know about Lys also and just how is the old man going to help?  Love the interaction with Miss Parker and Syd.  As for Broots and J,  what a hoot!  Now do I have to plan another trip to Texas to get another chapter out of you? 

Author's Response:

please..don't visit texas on my behalf..the consequences of too much time there are to too dire..

i'm glad you enjoyed, and for your information i am happily writing away.. so it shouldn't be too long. but as always.. it's gotta go through the beta's first. :)

hope you had fun in texas

and i promise.. lys.. weird old man.. all shall be revealed...soon...ish... 

First off, KatieQ, very nice and intense.  Almost cried when Jarod admitted he was defeated and really wonder if you are going to take that line a step futher:  "There was another way, one life whose termination would save them all." 

Nice seeing Lys back even if she's not doing well.  I really feel for her.   Miss Jarod's cell mate, the old man.  I know you are going to have him fit in some how and am curious.  And I miss Parker & Co.  next chapter maybe???

Now that's out of the way  ...  Well it is about time you posted another chapter!  I've waited and waited and what do you do?  Post it when I'm gone.  (wiping away a tear or two) And I suppose since I'll be in Texas next weekend w/o a computer, you'll post another chapter.  I'm seriously thinking of of poking you with my sharp pointy stick.  I'll have to un-pack it first since I'm planning a trip to see Parker (Thunderchild.)  On second thought, you've been hanging around with the Bad Boys of Africa a lot of late, so maybe I'll just save it for Parker.  ;)