This is an almost good story. It had lots of stuff that I enjoy reading in fanfiction, but it also had some major issues that nearly drove me away. The idea of Miss Parker conducting her own revolution behind everyone's back is an interesting one, but it lacked one thing: time; which was one of the main problems in this story. Everything happened too fast. Not at first. When Parker is travelling, things go smooth, but once she finds Jarod and his family it gains too much speed. I think some more story, some obstacles, some danger, would improve this story a great deal.

The writing could use some work. I had some trouble in format when converting the story to epub, but that doesn't explain all the typos and syntax inconsistencies.

And finally, one small yet crucial detail: Jarod and Miss Parker arguments sounded too hysterical. Tone down. Aim deeper. They're adults, not adolescents.

Chapter One.:  I just found this story.  Good beginning.  I hope you write some other things.