Great continuation, but unexpected death of Sidney. Overall good theme and expansion of Gemini's possible conflict.
Reviewer: electricq Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 13/12/09 06:30 am
Wow. I started (and finished ;p ) this fic last night and all i can say is wow! Big kudos on such an amazing piece of work. Not many stories tackle the 'J' side of things and the way you did it... Wow! It was dark and twisted but it was executed perfectly and certainly gave me a lot to think about at 3am this morning-but definently well woth it!
Date: 24/04/08 07:11 am
Well...that was one awesome story! :) It was even better than the previous one; I loved it how the scenes unfolded like in a movie. Great job. You should definitely write more! Wow.
Reviewer: Mia Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 01/03/08 05:10 pm
This story was amazing. I live in Belgium, you really did a nice job of writing this. I hope there will be other stories to read from you! Keep up the good work!Reviewer: Quinn Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 25/07/07 03:00 pm
I. . .I. . .wow, just. . .wow.
I devoured this story and Soul Splinters One in less time than I could have imagined possible. The way you toy with the audience, never quite letting us know who's doing what or what's going on until the stage is completely set, kept me reading as did the deeply emotional plot line.
If you're going to do that to us at the end, though, you need to include a character death warning, though. Syd is my favorite character in the entire Pretender universe, and I kept reading mostly to see what would happen to him. Killing him off at the very end after everyone else is safe just killed me, though the way in which you did it was beautiful.
All in all, this fanfic touched deeper than I thought any fanfic could. Kudos to you, your muse, and your committment to the story line.Reviewer: MP Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 20/07/07 07:40 pm
once again.... huh. wonderfully realistic. I always wondered how mp did her job, as a hunter and such.. I thought j was surprised, then forced into unconsciousness... a struggle? anyway, verrrry good, jarod... oops! sorry... :-pReviewer: CrackerjacknPez Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/07/07 09:08 pm
Thanks for this fic!!
It was so exciting to read, so stressful, it was so well-done that I felt like I was with them!
It's a great end even if Sydney died.
I hope you will finish the otehr fics. Please!Reviewer: Julia Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 07/07/07 02:36 am
Wow what an ending! You kept the suspense up right until the last paragraph. Very well executed.
I don't think I have ever read a story more focused on what is usually "fade to black" because it becomes to violent for the series, but you pull it off remarkably well. It isn't blood gushing everywhere that's the focus, it's the emotional trauma, which gives it many more layers than your average action fic.
Every once in a while it can be a little hard to follow what's actually happening, but I think that's mostly due to the fact that you don't rely on the classic clishe's when describing something. You use a much more vibrant and creative language, so you actually have to pay attention to every word, you can't just skim it. So it's really a good thing.
I think you did a great job describing what kind of pain, both emotional and physical, Lyle can inflict if he is truly given free range. And also how hard it is to recover from such deep trauma. You can't just go home and expect everything to be fine, there are consequences to abuse. You pictured that wonderfully both in Jarod and the clone.
Thank you for an amazing thrill ride down the path of psychological thrillers. An epic is complete.
- SarahReviewer: Manoline Signed [Report This]
Date: 05/07/07 04:00 am
Read this one through all in one big hit. How much worse can it get? I feel like smacking Jarod for being such a fool, he soooo should have killed Lyle, Sydney would have helped him deal with it in therapy... lol.
More soon please!!!!
Reviewer: jacci Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/06/07 06:52 am
All I can say is wow. I just read four chapters straight and you kept me on the edge of my seat(actually I think I was more hovering a meter over my seat for the most part) throughout the whole story. Every time you think it's going to work out, you read the next paragraph and everything is ten times worse than it was five minutes ago.Who lives and who dies? There's what I want to happen, and there is what makes the best story. I'll just leave that up to you.
Love your story and cannot wait for more.Reviewer: Manoline Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/05/07 04:07 pm
Yeaaaaaaaaaah!! I'm so happy you posted!!
It's still so captivating; I can't imagine what will happen next!!
So it's up to you to decide who lives or dies!! Maybe a little luck for J and Margaret won't hurt!!
Just a little note: "He didn’t wonder any more how the man had been able to convince the authorities that his father had killed his best friend." Mr Lyle, the real one ("father" of our Lyle!) didn't kill Lyle's (Bobby) best friend. But Bobby did and use his corpse to make believe that his father kill his son (him, Bobby), and not his best friend. Bobby's friend was declared "missing". So our Lyle "had convinced" that his father killed him, using his friend's corpse as if it was his body. I hope I'm clear!! I feel I'm repeating myself!!
I'm eager to read the sequel, as always!!Reviewer: Julia Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 07/05/07 02:47 am
Your writting is very intense and colorful. You have the ability to paint pictures with words instead of a brush and paint, and the reader can almost taste the sand and surf. Nicely done, I'm looking forward to reading more..
Date: 28/03/07 03:45 pm
It's so stunning, like always!
Each time, I want more and more!!It's so well-written, every thnig is perfect (the way the characters react, the emotions...) Continue!!
And Happy New Year!Reviewer: Julia Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 02/01/07 08:39 am
Is that obvious??!! yeah I'm french! I hope there will be snow at Meribel, because this year the weather wasn't very kind to us (for now!) I lives not that far from Meribel, let's say about 300km, more in south!^^ And you, where are you from?
Have great holidays, and have a nice trip in France (don't forget to taste the cheeses ^^) Have fun skiing (I hope not on the rocks by lack of snow^^).
Hope to read you soon!!Reviewer: Julia Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 31/12/06 06:21 pm