Hi that was a very good story.Reviewer: Katescats Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 02/05/17 02:17 am
I liked the way the story begin. It poses several interesting questions, like what happened to Jarod, or who took Miss Parker. The characters are also well written. The only thing wrong so far is the usage of verbs: some sentences mix present and past perfect, which can be confusing sometimes.
A more thorough review will be given at the last chapter.Reviewer: Joel Gomes Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/12/13 02:59 pm
I believe I'm just stumbling across this story for the first time and I'm liking it very much. You paint a clear picture with the right amount of detail and your style is very Hitchcockesque-- please accept that as the huge compliment it's intended to be. *clicks over to chapter 2*Reviewer: Mirage Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/06/11 02:43 am
This is another keeper of a story. Good plot lines.Reviewer: elect Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 11/12/09 11:50 pm
oops chapter 3, and it seems that the steel jaws of the trap are closing in on our favourite pretender...! How exciting, he's probably in for some hard time with Lyle now... And how wrong of me to think that! But hey, this is the beauty of fanfic!
Can't wait to read chapter 4!
Date: 20/10/08 09:22 pm
ewwwwww, Mr Parker's severed head stored in a cupboard... (just finished chapter 2) Poor Miss Parker, she's going to lose her sanity if she stays locked up in that dungeon with her father's decapitated head for sole company! And I don't trust Dr Kearny...
But I like your story very very much! once again, can't wait to read more!
Date: 10/10/08 11:25 pm
All this is very mysterious still (I've only read chapter 1) but very pleasantly written. I'm definitely hooked and I look forward to reading more when I get the chance!
Looking forward to hear from you. ;-)
Thank you for the review.Reviewer: middleman Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/10/08 08:47 pm
Wow, I loved your story, regardless of the glaring lack of commas and the misuse of tenses. You've got a well-devised PLOT and great action, as well as romance - things I like most in a good story. I stayed up all night reading it, and now I have no time to go to sleep, as I've got to be up already... :)
Thanks for writing this! :)Reviewer: Mia Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 29/02/08 07:12 pm
I stayed up till like 2am to finish reading, it was excellent. One of the closest to in-character I've seen in a long time!Reviewer: Mel Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 17/09/07 12:33 am
oh wow! NICE going! looking fwd to reading what the last thing in the cupboard was... don't remember reading what it was.. mp's recovery seemed too quick to be realistic considering how far gone she was, but maybe that's just me.. perhaps this was an excellent example of the true power of, well, love. :-pReviewer: CrackerjacknPez Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/07/07 11:31 am
Wow, I loved your story and I surely want a sequel. I so want to know what we happen now that everyone is ''safe''. Very good story!Reviewer: winnieAlex Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 24/02/06 05:06 am
Your fanfic was very good !!! But the end is somewhat abrupt, now you have to show us how Jarod will fight against the Centre or how he will destroy it. I'd also like to know how he deals with his newly found family and his former pursuers on an everyday basis 'not easy) : conflicts, jalousy, anger, friendship, hate, love...whatever it is. But in any case keep writing, because I'd love to have more than just one fanfic. So a sequel would be real fun !!!Reviewer: Miss Nathou Love Signed [Report This]
Date: 23/02/06 10:24 pm
Sure I want a sequel!! As ever, this chapter is very good. Sorry if I was too eager ; S I love your story but the end upsets me a little, it's too easy for them, I mean, the Center will still hunt them. They have to destroy it.Reviewer: Julia Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 23/02/06 10:23 pm
More than a week without a sequel!! I'm gonna die!! lol
Author's Response: Be patient, o little one. lol still busy...want to make it a good one...
Date: 20/02/06 07:03 pm
I can't possibly wait to find out what happens next....with all the characters had gone through I think they deserve a very happy ending....Reviewer: goldentail Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 12/02/06 02:20 pm
Oh my God!! It's so insane!! It's getting darker and darker! This chapter is full of actions, I didn't have the time to relax one second, lol! I still have tachycardia, as if I was in the story! Your description are so well-done and they make the story so real. Bravo! It's look like the bads win for the moment and I can't imagine how the goods will get through all these evil's plans!! Nevertheless, I would have appreciate a little more writing on Miss Parker's feelings about her rescue. I'm eager to discover why Lyle had plotted with Alex, what were his intentions? This chapter is excellent. I'm waiting for the next chapter. And I can say that I'm burnig with impatience!!Reviewer: Julia Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 12/02/06 09:03 am
WOW.I can´t imagine the end.I hope you will.Reviewer: lucitana Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 12/02/06 08:12 am