I liked the way the story begin. It poses several interesting questions, like what happened to Jarod, or who took Miss Parker. The characters are also well written. The only thing wrong so far is the usage of verbs: some sentences mix present and past perfect, which can be confusing sometimes.

A more thorough review will be given at the last chapter.

This is another keeper of a story. Good plot lines.

ewwwwww, Mr Parker's severed head stored in a cupboard... (just finished chapter 2) Poor Miss Parker, she's going to lose her sanity if she stays locked up in that dungeon with her father's decapitated head for sole company! And I don't trust Dr Kearny...
But I like your story very very much! once again, can't wait to read more!

Wow, I loved your story, regardless of the glaring lack of commas and the misuse of tenses. You've got a well-devised PLOT and great action, as well as romance - things I like most in a good story. I stayed up all night reading it, and now I have no time to go to sleep, as I've got to be up already... :)

 Thanks for writing this! :)

thanks for writing this! looking fwd to reading is sequel.

oh wow! NICE going! looking fwd to reading what the last thing in the cupboard was... don't remember reading what it was.. mp's recovery seemed too quick to be realistic considering how far gone she was, but maybe that's just me.. perhaps this was an excellent example of the true power of, well, love. :-p

This is so good, I can't believe I waited so long to read it, bad me

Ohhh how nasty is this Lyle, it is delicious!!!

I know I'm a little behind, but I just wanted to say that I absolutely love this story. Gut wrenching, soul tearing, beautifully written. *Moves right along to sequel*

Your fanfic was very good !!! But the end is somewhat abrupt, now you have to show us how Jarod will fight against the Centre or how he will destroy it. I'd also like to know how he deals with his newly found family and his former pursuers on an everyday basis 'not easy) : conflicts, jalousy, anger, friendship, hate, love...whatever it is. But in any case keep writing, because I'd love to have more than just one fanfic. So a sequel would be real fun !!!

More than a week without a sequel!! I'm gonna die!! lol

Author's Response: Be patient, o little one. lol still busy...want to make it a good one...

Oh my God!! It's so insane!! It's getting darker and darker! This chapter is full of actions, I didn't have the time to relax one second, lol! I still have tachycardia, as if I was in the story! Your description are so well-done and they make the story so real. Bravo! It's look like the bads win for the moment and I can't imagine how the goods will get through all these evil's plans!! Nevertheless, I would have appreciate a little more writing on Miss Parker's feelings about her rescue. I'm eager to discover why Lyle had plotted with Alex, what were his intentions? This chapter is excellent. I'm waiting for the next chapter. And I can say that I'm burnig with impatience!!