Title: Chapter 1

This was well written and engaging, and the emotion - of both Jarod and Charles - was realistic.

The only point I would raise is that Charles chose Jarod's clone's name rather than let the boy choose a name himself, though he might have wanted Charles to choose a name for him as his parent the way Margaret and Charles had chosen Jarod, Kyle and Emily's names.

A nice piece, and I hope Jarod finds his family soon even though this was the end of the piece.

Reviewer: planet p Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 12/12/08 10:49 am
Title: Chapter 1

Hi

Just read your story it was good.

Reviewer: Katescats Anonymous starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 08/06/07 08:38 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Very nicely done, you wroite very well and one can almost hear Major Charles' voice and see Jarod crying.  Very well done!

Reviewer: RaChell Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 16/05/07 08:15 pm


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