Title: A Dark and Stormy Night

Oh wow. That was incredible, flowed nicely and was brilliantly constructed. Very clever to end it the way it began "dark and stormy night." Awesome. Also, I want to add that I read your bio and I truly hope that this year is kinder to you.

Reviewer: Mirage Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05/01/11 01:38 am
Title: A Dark and Stormy Night

Nicely done, but just too sad. 

Mercy

Reviewer: Mercy Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 08/07/07 09:03 pm
Title: A Dark and Stormy Night

That was great, I especially loved the opening!!

Reviewer: jacci Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/06/07 08:19 pm
Title: A Dark and Stormy Night

Very sad and touching.  It would have been better had you slowed down and fleshed the story out more.  But overall it's good.

Reviewer: RaChell Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 28/04/07 08:54 pm
Title: A Dark and Stormy Night

Not bad. You need to find a beta reader or something to help you because you have problems making your paragraphs flow without using "Anyways" (which isn't a word, btw). Not bad. You need some work though.

Reviewer: Christine Anonymous starhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 01/06/05 03:14 am


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